Stealing Hearts - Comments

I really like this story. Please update!

I absolutely love this :D It's so different from the other stories and it's really well written.

This just got a whole load more dramatic than it already was, and that was pretty dramarama anyway.

The build up to Chloe lying to Eleanor was brilliant! I love how it was all just a one sided argument until George stepped in and obviously buggered everything up for himself. And the continuation of the jumper, like when she stole it, it hasn't been mentioned too much since, but now it seems to have become the ultimate weapon.

The shit really did hit the fan after the jumper bit, and the way you described Eleanor's reaction, I felt like I could really hear that scream.

This was my favourite part by far, well worth waiting for.

Wow, what an angst-filled chapter!

I had a face of omgno: for almost the entire part! :tehe:

It's like, Eleanor has finally had enough of Chloe and she's snapped, which is out of character for her.

It's kinda sweet but not when George just stands in the doorway, wanting to go and stand with his girlfriend but doesn't want to get involved. It's like he doesn't like conflict and wants to just shy away from it.

And when everybody comes in, its like they're arguing to an audience and its all worrying and scary.

This line was so sad:
“What do you mean not wanted?” Chloe asked with agitation. “That’s not true,” she carried on rather meekly looking around at the people collected around her.

Her eyes fell upon Emily and Laura who shot angry and disgusted looks back at her.

It's like she was never really accepted, and has always been the outsider from everybody.

And then :cheese: What a bitch Chloe has become! Pulling George's jumper from her bag and claiming that he was in her room with her!

And then all hell breaks loose, and you wrote it bloody well. It's like a mish-mash of jumbled words, with nobody really knowing exactly what's going on.

Amazing update, Nina, as always. :arms:

So while putting off the media coursework for as long as humanly possibly, I'ma leave you really good feedback for this. :)

1. YAYYYYYYYYY GEORGE IS BACK.
and

There comes a moment in life when you have to realize that you no longer know who your best friend is.

The person whom you have spent almost every living minute with becomes a strange entity to you. You do not dare challenge or criticise them for fear of encouraging long buried grudges or arguments to resurface, so instead you carry on living your life as if nothing went wrong, as if everything was the way it had been once upon a time, even if that means living a lie.

^ That is so truthful. I can really see where Eleanor's coming from there. I think a lot of people can relate to that, I think everyone feels the same way quite often about their own friends. I like how you always write things that are easy to relate to, even if it's just a simple sentence or paragraph.

George was already sprawled out on the sofa wrestling with his thoughts
I like the way George was really freaked out, and that he decided not to scare Eleanor as well. In a way, it was cute, but at the same time, I feel cautious towards Chloe, and it sounds really stupid cause she's just a character.

With complete shock she took in Chloe's newly dyed glossy brown extensioned hair, which was a mirror image of the hair that Eleanor cared for with such pride.

George watched his girl friend grow increasingly pale as she stood their motionless, unable to take her shocked eyes off Chloe, who only laughed and smiled.

"Looks amazing doesn't it?" She asked flicking her hair over her shoulder causing a whiff of salon shampoo to waft towards Eleanor who felt sick to the stomach, and flooded with panic.

^ And that, just made me smile. The way Chloe doesn't seem phased by it at all and the shock coming from Eleanor, it just shows how opposite they really are.

I love this story, Nina. Never abandon George again :)

Woah.....
It's amazing how well you describe Chloe and her illness.
The intricacy of her personality makes me feel like her character
isn't fictional at all. You've definately surpassed my expectations
of your writing. And I thought your writing was absolutely amazing
to begin with so it just tells you how much you're ability has
blossomed over the months.
:D

Wow, I wasn't expecting that.
It explains the box under the bed anyway.
I can't wait to see where you take this now.

Oh, wow. This is just brilliant
I love how you're carrying it off with such ease & it is believable.
Wowww, it'll be utterly amazing when it picks up and Chloe goes for her new target ;)

This story is getting so interesting! I'm really hooked on the storyline and can't wait to read more!

I think this is the next story of yours that I will love very very much and pester you for updates with, like I did with the Andrew one. :lmfao

But seriously the story is amazing. You've described Chloe's condition really well, you've made it believeable.

The relationship between Eleanor and George is really adorable too. They're sweet together.

This story is way too awesome for its own good.
I can already tell the drama is going to be filled to the brim.
:D

And that just sounded like I thought the update "wasn't bad". It was bloody brilliant, ok :XD

This part was intriguing. I wonder what's wrong with Chloe - I'm really interested to find out and I hope that it's nothing too bad.

I liked the interaction between Eleanor and George, you got that just right.

And lmao everybody was stealing the cookie dough. :tehe: Reminds me of when I make cookies. :XD

Alsoo, it was good. Definitely not bad, I assure you. Twas a great update.

:cute:

George needs to be a cookie dough thief. He could do with fattening up a little. :)
I love this story, I'm still wondering what is wrong with Chloe and what the medication's all about.
And I can't wait for the accidental molesting incident to happen.

Oh my god, my hair just had to be put in there :tehe:
I loveeed this. I really did Nina.
The thread comes in so handy for little bits to include.
Eleanor & George are so adorable
....I can't wait for Chloe to change it :)

Chloe is so... loveable in a weird sense. I don't know. I love her character.
And this plot line so far is just amazing. Honestly
I loved my litter role :tehe: Kurt Geiger retail manager! I chuckled.
& George is just too sweet.

*fish slap* :mrgreen:
I'm so interested in Chloe, theres like a lot of mystery with her.
You had me laughing at the merch colours and stuff. Ahh that thread is inspiring. :)

I love this story line.
And the beginning dialogue had me in boughs of laughter.
:D

I love this story! :arms:

This line is great: "Eleanor is sharing a flat with a complete psycho."

:tehe:

I absolutely love the way you're going about describing the things that are going on.

The last line was particularly great, too.

:cute:

Ninaaaaaaa!

I loved this first part.

But you know I did ;)

I absolutely love the way you went into detail describing everything. It paints a perfect picture in my mind and I can't wait to see where you're going to take this. It's also interesting how contrasting Chloe and Eleanor are. :cute:

And I guess there's only one thing left to say...

OOH HELLO!

What a perfect beginning to what will be a wonderful story
I can just sense it ;)
You have this habit of creating female leads that are so interesting
Sub-scri-bing :)