Led By Pride - Comments

I'm here...again. You know, I was in a really crappy mood since I'm getting sick, I haven't finished my homework and I have to stay after school tomorrow. But for some reason I thought of this story, the amazing plot twist you created, and the happy ending.

And of course, I couldn't resist re-reading it! This story is just so amazing. Seriously it makes me cry, it makes me laugh, it makes me smile, and in the end it cheered me up! It's such a rollercoaster of emotions and yet it leaves you with a great feeling.

So yeah, I should go finish my homework now and maybe get an hour or two of sleep. Cheers, and without a doubt, I'll be back yet again at some point... :D

Ok, the total mindfuck was amazing. Already told you that but shit, had to be said again. This is no doubt, hands down the best story I've read thus far on here. Now I need to go see what else you have that I haven't read!

I loved this story. It was awesome. Great Job with it!!

I love the part in chapter 11 that's like, straight from Anastasia. lol That movie kicks SO much ass and this story was amazing!

AAAHHHH! AMAZING! I just had to come back and read this. It was so long ago that I first came upon this story. I actually think it was one of the first A7X fanfics on Mibba I had ever read. Haha, I was even the last commenter, although, my comment was a disgraceful length. So I feel the need to write you a longer one this time, to make up for the last one. =D

So I've come to the conclusion that Zacky is my favorite supporting character in this story. Throughout the whole story he made those little comments that just had me laughing for five minutes straight. Plus, the part in the Epilogue with him and Gena was just priceless. >.<

It was so ironic as I read this story becuase I had a sense of deja vu throughout every chapter. I was even more surprised that I remembered absolutely everything that happened in it. I was like, "Wow, I must have good memory." because it was almost a year ago that I read this. But I don't think it's so much my memory, but rather your amazing writing! I definitely wouldn't have remembered if this story had not left such an impression on me last time.

Moving on, I just adore the relationship you created between Brian and Em in the very beginning. Because it was so gradual, but not in an annoying way, where you want to be like, "Come on and fuck each other already!" It was so very realistic, considering Em absolutely despised him. And then when they finally gave in it was so passionate. With every ounce of frustration and love put into it.

What I loved most was definitely the first dressing room scene. That was so good because in the end their attitude was completely different toward each other. Brilliant.

Also their little Thanksgiving vacation to Jersey was rather fun, especially the little jabs Em and Jack kept throwing at each other. Kind of sad at the same time that even though they were adults they couldn't get along, but still. Crazy family.

The plane ride was scary. I had to remind myself that they don't actually die in the end.

And of course concerning the most important topic, their miracuulous survival. I was in tears the moment Brian was shot down and then the whole time that Em had to endure her love for him while he didn't remember anything. It was so horrible! But then he remembered and I was like "YES!" Smiling like crazy and crying at the same time. Iris is a very nice song, by the way, a personal favorite. ^.^

I think that's a decent length comment. Actually I have some things to add but my mom's yelling at me to start getting ready. Girls' night out!!!

Oh gosh, I finished it! It was so good! Completely unexpected how you brought them back to life. But what exactly happened? Or is is a mystery? Anyways I love it so much, even though it was long I'm so glad I read it!

omg! i just read this entire story!! it's wonderful. BUT, does Brian die in the 'remix' of the story? or do they like not go on the plane? 'Cause if he died, again, i would seriously cry!

by far, my favourite story of yours :)
so good
loved it

xx

oh my god i was sure that i was going to kill you when i read that it was a dream
but man!!! that is amazing
one of the most original stories ever
actually THE most original
I love it so much
and The chapter with Gena and Zacky is soooo funny

OMG!
I really can't believe it's over.
and the story was god damn beautiful.
freaking beautiful ending , too :D
one of the most amazing stories I have ever read. seriously.
I FUCKING LOVED IT! :O
you have a seriously amazing talent.
I am sooooo gonna read your other stories. this was just too good.
hell, great job. :D

Hi Katelyn,

I finished your story, and I think you did a great job, I am amazed at how true to life you got your characters. You have a gift and I am proud of you. Definitely keep writing. I wish I could take credit for your talent, but it seems to be a natural gift.

Now I don't want you think I am being too critical, but there are a few minor changes I am going to suggest. First of all I am pretty sure that someone in New Jersey would fly out of Newark instead of JFK. Any New Jersey readers out there? Let me know if that would be true. This is the 21st century, and I feel most of your readers can't identify with the Japanese/Pearl Harbor story. I suggest you change that part to something more recent like Irag or Afganistan and the Gulf War. Next, I would make Emily's niece about three years older. I think it would make her charater more believable. I wish also that you would rewrite the scene in the mosh pit. Now think about this,,,,,,instead of Val falling and hitting her head and getting knocked unconscious, how about that she just sprains her ankle and Matt and Brian come down into the crowd and pull the both of you out and carry you on stage and let you sit on top of the speakers for the rest of the concert. Think about it, if you were at a concert and the band just walked out, do you thiink the crowd would just go home? There probably would be a riot. One last thing I can always tell when sex scenes are written by females. They make the guy a super stud that goes for hours and hours. Women eat it up, but guys aren't going to believe it. Heck, I only went for about 20 minutes when I made you. (LOL).

Now I did catch a few typos that need to be fixed, but I think if you use the spell checker it will find them for you. One last thing that you must change. In fact I as your father forbid you to use Mildred or Millie as the name of the bitchy aunt.
Change it to anything you like...Betty, Lavern, Camilia. I don't care what you use except Maybelle. Those names are off limits. This story is good enough to be picked up by a publisher, and who knows the future. But if your Aunt Millie by some remote chance ever reads this story, I am not going to take the heat from her or my mom for you. Believe me you never want to be on the bad side of Millie or Maybelle.

Well that's about it. Again you did a great job of holding the readers interest, and you characters were amazingly true to life, Good plot twist at the end.
Keep writing,

Love,

Dad

awww im sad its the end=[
i loved this story so much.
you did a really great job writing it^_^

I can't believe this is the end :(
I'd love to read a sequel, or something like that.
'Cause I absolutely fell for this story.
Beautiful work. <3

that was one of the most amazing stories I've ever read!
you have a great talent :D

ACK!
NOOO!
*cries*
it's over....

aww!
what a cute ending.
woud there be a sequel by any chance?
please do consider writing one!
PLEASE?? :D

i can't believe its over!
i loved every minute of it!

that was SOOOO GOOOD!!!

THAT WAS THE BEST ENDING I HAVE EVER READ!!
are you going to start another story?
if you are whats it going to be/who about?

AMAZING END