January 16th, 2009 at 05:37pm
Hey, why do you only have another comment on here? That’s not cool. Especially because this one was just so creepy and cool. Yeah. Anyways, I loved reading it. Something creepy to keep me on my toes and such. :]
Ahh.
The first line alone was so chilling. I knew it was going to be creepy, especially with the use of the words, ‘Bad Stuff’. It was just so... fitting, I think, for what Gerard was in the story.
“Mikey, come on. This isn’t f-funny anymore,” he demanded angrily.
Oh jeez, now Gerard’s character was like... set. He’s one of those people who just don’t know what’s happening, the kind of out-of-control person, isn’t he? Creepy but then not creepy but then creepy? I just got shivers.
And he said, “Frank, I think I killed someone.”
“I’ll be there in ten minutes.”
I love how as soon as he says that, Frank says he’s coming over. Gerard still sounds creepy, and that was just like... shit, I keep getting shivers.
“Mikey?” Frank gasped in a ragged voice, gaping at Gerard through a stinging layer of tears. “You’re telling me you killed your brother?”
This just keeps getting better. Gerard is just being the sex-obsessed friend and a psycho but like not a psycho and Frank’s taking control over this. I could just picture it happening like that. And I also think that my eyes were as wide as Frank’s.
“S-something happens when we’re near each other. It’s just...he looks at me, and I know that what’s in our veins isn’t the Bad Stuff, it can’t be, not if the same stuff is in both of our veins…”
Wow, he’s just making no sense. That’s just so... creepy. So typical of some weirdo to just ramble off about things that they think about in their head. And then... jesus fuck, cutting his own hand? That’s just like... he is definitely not (even though it was totally obvious before) normal. And the creepy calm talking? That’s just so... amazing that you could get the creepy personality down right.
“Well, maybe we can make it look like that. We’ll…we’ll put him in the bathtub and deepen the handcuff marks on his wrists. It’ll look like he killed himself, Gerard.”
Hm, genius plan, Frank. And it’s kind of cute, how they have to get away together. Cute, and creepy. But both. If that’s possible.
OHSHIT I forgot about Mikey. Shit, he had to die. Well... oh well. At least Gerard and Frank don’t have to go to jail, or do they? Hmmm.
And I like the way it ended, just almost hanging like that. And it’d be stupid if I said that you got Gerard’s creepy personality perfectly, wouldn’t it? Haha. Anyways, I loved this one. :]
but he's so innocent and unknowing, like a little kid....
and I think that's the creepiest thing of all,
because he's so innocent, but he's not...
it's very weird!
I loved it!