I'm always one for femmeslash, especially in fluff form, so I automatically liked it a lot. But on top of those two things, it was also very, very well written. It flowed perfectly. The rhythm of the whole piece was just...magical.
The one constant in Lacey's life was the old streetlight outside her window That was just perfect. I don't think there would've been a better opening line for this one-shot.
Lit by the lone streetlight, Amy’s face took on an ethereal glow and her raven hair shined like silver. With the soft summer breeze blowing through her locks, she seemed less human and more like a Grecian goddess that Lacey was blessed beyond compare to even be in the presence of. Just...shit. That was...undescribable. Just beautiful, honestly.
Throughout the whole piece you can clearly hear the voices of these two girls, how much they love each other. You can feel both of their emotions, hear every though going through their heads. Thta really did impress me, because I've never really been able to capture more than one character's persona at a time. But you've done it here, and so simply and so beautifully too.
Lacy turned the other girl’s head so that her hazel eyes pierced Amy’s icy blues. Again, so wonderful. It lets the reader picture the two girls perfectly. I haven't seen many pictures of Lacey or Amy, and therfore I can't remember what they really look like, but through that sentence, I suddenly produced a clear picture of them, standing by that fence. That's just...amazing.
“A whole ocean could separate us or a whole fucking solar system. But you’re always gonna be right here.” Lacey placed Amy’s hand over her heart. “As long as my heart’s still beating, you’ll always be near me. And we’ll see each other every summer and Christmas. Ames, I promise, you’ll always be mine, and I’ll always be yours.” Such a sweet moment. I loved it.
The last line seemed to both fit right in and be out of place. I had to read it over a couple of times to really get it. But still, it was a wonderful finale to a wonderful one-shot.
I'm always one for femmeslash, especially in fluff form, so I automatically liked it a lot.
But on top of those two things, it was also very, very well written. It flowed perfectly. The rhythm of the whole piece was just...magical.
The one constant in Lacey's life was the old streetlight outside her window
That was just perfect. I don't think there would've been a better opening line for this one-shot.
Lit by the lone streetlight, Amy’s face took on an ethereal glow and her raven hair shined like silver. With the soft summer breeze blowing through her locks, she seemed less human and more like a Grecian goddess that Lacey was blessed beyond compare to even be in the presence of.
Just...shit. That was...undescribable. Just beautiful, honestly.
Throughout the whole piece you can clearly hear the voices of these two girls, how much they love each other. You can feel both of their emotions, hear every though going through their heads. Thta really did impress me, because I've never really been able to capture more than one character's persona at a time. But you've done it here, and so simply and so beautifully too.
Lacy turned the other girl’s head so that her hazel eyes pierced Amy’s icy blues.
Again, so wonderful. It lets the reader picture the two girls perfectly. I haven't seen many pictures of Lacey or Amy, and therfore I can't remember what they really look like, but through that sentence, I suddenly produced a clear picture of them, standing by that fence. That's just...amazing.
“A whole ocean could separate us or a whole fucking solar system. But you’re always gonna be right here.” Lacey placed Amy’s hand over her heart. “As long as my heart’s still beating, you’ll always be near me. And we’ll see each other every summer and Christmas. Ames, I promise, you’ll always be mine, and I’ll always be yours.”
Such a sweet moment. I loved it.
The last line seemed to both fit right in and be out of place. I had to read it over a couple of times to really get it. But still, it was a wonderful finale to a wonderful one-shot.
Overall, I just simply loved it.