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  • What's in a name?

    What's in a name? (100)

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    Thank you all for your lovely reviews. In Love
    And thanks for reading,
    ilyall. :arms: :arms:
    September 29th, 2008 at 09:54pm
  • soft rains.

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    :cheese:
    You're so talented, it's not even funny.
    I loved this.
    The characterizations were spot on and your sentence structure/language skills are impeccable.
    And the ending made me :lmfao so hard.
    Beginning to end, it was fabulous.
    September 29th, 2008 at 02:27am
  • z3ez

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    Jon is such a baby. :lmfao
    There's just parts in the story where it seems
    like he's still stuck between a weird limbo of
    teenager and adult and I love it. :XD

    And Shawn is kind of like the stranger with
    a van offereing him some candy. :tehe:
    It's funny how it seems like the roles have
    kind of switched and now Shawn is the one
    bringing up the kissing instead of Jon and
    really pushing it.

    “Well, if you’d marry Matt you’d, you know. I’m a, a way better catch.
    So like, if you would marry him you’d definitely go to the altar with me.
    I’m way, like, waay more attractive than him.”

    Smug bastard. :coffee:
    September 18th, 2008 at 02:12am
  • soft rains.

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    That chapter was just In Love
    I'm too dazzled to form a proper reveiw.
    But I will say that it was amazing.
    You're such a talented writer.
    September 14th, 2008 at 01:28am
  • the Wizard

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    Matt's such a mom :XD
    And a girl, I guess. But I'm scared he'd hit me if I mention that in a tone of voice any louder than an inaudible whisper.
    :shifty

    D'ah, I just love Jon saying that what Shawn does is art. I find it so adorable. Shawn (in the story, I guess, and if it's in real life too then awesome) seems to just slash paint for fun, and I love his reaction to Jon's suggestion. It's like he's... oh, this sounds odd, but it's my side of the brain, i can do what I want with it :hand: It's like he's an ego-food whore :shifty :XD But it's cute how he pushes it.

    I love you for somehow pushing in the incident into the story. The one where Shawn makes out with the dude... :XD
    Shawn paused for a second and when he spoke again his voice was almost a bit strained because of held back giggles.

    “Then I got a punch in the face.”
    :lmfao

    Jon's so suggestive. Shy, but suggestive. Reluctant, but suggestive.
    A shy kind of reluctant. In Love :shifty

    I was slightly bummed that the chapter ended. Sad I was like WHAT?! no more? I have to wait?

    -capms- I'll wait as long it takes. -cleans out pebble-

    :shifty
    September 13th, 2008 at 02:02am
  • z3ez

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    Sorry I didnt leave a comment on the last chapter. omgno:
    But you know I loved it and I loved this one even more. :tehe:

    The whole time I was grinning so wide and laughing, they're
    interactions and personalities are so perfectly dead-on it's
    so easy to imagination it really happening. :lmfao

    And imagining Matt's bitchface through the whole thing
    was quite enjoyable to. :tehe: Really Shawn seems
    like a hard person to start an arguement with. :XD

    Jon's awkwardness while trying to defend Shawn
    is so adorable in a mancrush kind of way. :XD

    Sorry for the shitty comment, but I can't wait until next Saturday. :XD
    September 8th, 2008 at 01:34am
  • soft rains.

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    That update was very pwnful. :cute:
    Matt reminded me of a kindergarten teacher. :lmfao:
    I love those types of awkward conversations. :mrgreen:
    Jon kind of makes me want to go 'awwww'.
    Shawn getting punched. :XD :lmfao
    This whole chapter was an epic win. For sure.
    September 7th, 2008 at 05:03am
  • the Wizard

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    Ah! -tackles- I love the title! See? You always get it right.
    Oh, and I had already figured you'd use that picture for the layout. x]
    :shifty

    You already know I love this.
    But I had to comment anyways, because if I leave it for later, I'll forget to.

    It's just the way it's starts like a funny thing, then it goes serious, then back to funny even though it lingers with Shawn. I can taste the feeling of it. The awkwardness is just... not nervewracking, no, just... a little odd, a little laughable, and just perfect. I think it's a little funny that Jon's the deer stuck in the headlights, all nervous and trying to get out of it. Like he really had thought a lot about asking if Shawn had ever kissed a dude.

    “If you’re gonna start making out I’m leaving!”
    :lmfao The image in my head = priceless.

    Does it count if I say that I can't wait for more?
    :shifty :tehe:

    :arms:
    September 1st, 2008 at 09:10pm
  • soft rains.

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    I loved the first chapter. :cute:
    You know, they probably have had that conversation....
    :shifty
    Anyways, this was amazing.
    (Can you tell I stink at reveiws?)

    P.S. That picture is just... :yah
    September 1st, 2008 at 04:19am
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