Dreambringers

Hey people! This is my first entry of my first story! The idea for this came in a dream, believe it or not. I had the dream the night before a doctor's appointment for my chest and back, so I wrote every time we had to wait for those doctors. I only wrote about ten pages that day, but I had a good feeling that writing about something I obsessed over could be fun, so I kept writing. It's my longest story yet! This is just the first part, and I hope I can find it in me to continue, Hope you like it!!
P.S. Comments are appreciated. Did I start the action too fast? Should I give more back story at the beginning or add little snippets later? So far I'm adding snippets...