We're Here to Take Your Hearts

I've written alot of adoption stories, but I'm hoping this is my best.

Clarissa is the new kid at the orphanage. She is quiet and scared of being in this large dark home. After about a week in the home a visitor comes to interview a bunch of kids. Including Clarissa. When the man doesn't adopt her, he tells one of his friends about her. Will she get adopted? And if she does, will she be happy?

Will Include:
My Chemical Romance
The Academy Is...
Fall Out Boy
Panic! At The Disco

please comment, and it's okay to be brutal ;D