Not Another Fairytale

This will be a three to five chapter story on Mibba. When this project of mine is complete, it shall be put together in the form of a short story. This will be placed in my senior project which is writing and placing together a collection of original short stories of mine. Any feedback you can give for each chapter would be greatly appreciated and I would like to have several constructive comments to help better my writing.

"Mom, I'm so excited! I think I might actually have a real friend!"