50 Tips for Writing.
43. Don't tell the reader what's going on
Don't tell the reader what's going on. Show them. Never do things like (Five minutes later) or (Later that day). Those things belong in comic books. No published story has ever done things like (In Kayla's room back at the house). When I say show the reader what's going on in the story, I mean, use your sensory descriptions. I get sick and tired of people complaining they don't have any readers and asking to be advertised. If you have (In the kitchen) or (The next day) everywhere in your story, I don't blame your readers for not really wanting to read a sixth grader's attempt to write the manga way. Sensory descriptions are my magic formula, yes, I'm giving it away, whether you can make my secret ingredient work for your story and to your advantage is your problem, not mine. Use your head. Use your imagination. Use spell check. Use your common sense. Things always work out if you consider the very basics of everything and work from there.