The Fall And Further Fall Of Kiata - Dying

Kiata...Kiata...

This is a prologue thing to the book I may or may not write about Kiata - just her life story. She has an interesting one, yes she does. Look here for a summary. Yes, that's a SUMMARY.

Opinions? Advice? At some points it's a bit confused, and this is pretty much my first time breaking the fourth wall...but on the other hand I really like my mix of positive and negative connotations, using "glistening starlight" to describe a snare.

PS You pronounce "Kiata" kee - ah - ta, emphasis on the second syllable, no ar sound. If I hear ONE MORE PERSON pronounce it Kiarta...