Review for Audrey T.I thought your summary was well written, and didn’t think it gave away a lot of the story. I’m starting to become a fan of summaries that are more like this because it gives your readers just enough to click onto the chapter one button. I personally thought it set the mood rather nicely for me to read on. I’ve seen The Vampire Diaries at least once, but enough to get the concept of what’s going on. I kind of thought this TV series was something like Twilight, but with more blood and sex.
That day, that first day, I knew he was different, inhuman. Something about his pulsating being; the way the sunlight played against his skin, the way the rays seemed almost afraid to touch upon him. He was fascinating and I was entranced.I thought you captured the whole “when I first saw you, my world changed. You are the most beautiful thing to walk into my life and nothing else matters” attitude. For some strange reason, I love Damon, through his actions and voice, he’s very sexy and I can tell that there’s a lot of sexual tension between them, it’s not even funny. Your descriptions are dream worthy, I’m not even going to quote anything from that paragraph because everything was so right about it.
I like how you went through and described Tina’s childhood, and I liked that she seemed vulnerable to the fact that she was even a witch, like she didn’t want to remember. The little incidents foreshadowing her fate.
I was thirteen and Damon Salvatore had tried to kill me.I loved how Damon kept popping up every three years to give Tina some kind of hint that somehow they were more connected to each other than she thought. I really like where this is going, and I can sense something good going to happen. My favorites parts would have to be Tina’s narration and how she seemed so confused about who she really was. I don’t know, but besides the fact that Tina is a witch, she’s different and seems likable and smart. There’s one thing about your grammar that threw me off, I noticed that in two places you placed a comma after the word “and” when I felt there was no need for it.
I thought you had powerful diction in this story and it really showed. I think this is the most descriptive piece I’ve read from you.
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Review for The DoctorYour summary is very interesting and from the title, a Nursery Rhyme came to mind. But when I actually saw the picture and background image, a Native American aspect came to play, I thought about those little stories our teachers used to read to us about how the moon and stars were created or why clouds feel lonely, little stories like that. The foreign writing was lovely too, even though I had no idea what the origins of it was from.
They say I'm delusional. They've never been stared at by a car. I had t tell them about what happened in the library.In this line, you forgot the
o in the word to. But so far, I have no idea what’s going on with the main character in the story. The setting is difficult to comprehend, but you capture the fact that this character is different from the rest and how isolated she feels around her friends.
There are whispers on the pages of my book. Whispers from Time itself. It's written in a soft, gray ink. It's not pencil: I checked and you couldn't erase the words.I loved this sentence because a lot of Native tribes tell stories that are mainly said orally. And I liked how this story is written in ink, but is always changing, like something’s in life are doing, it just shows that nothing is written in stone and things are always changing.
So I trust Time over Sophronius. The words themselves scare me: why are they directed to me? The book is not read by many other people; the fourteen lines are either too complicated or too twee for this place./I really like your main character. I love the narration, but sometimes you have awkward wording that makes it hard for me to understand what’s going on.
"Don't you understand them>?" I could tell she was trying to pull that trick that psychologists pull when they want to know something, even when they know you don't actually know.”I noticed you have an error is the quotation, but so far, I realized that now the main character is named Alice, and Alice, to me seems like a daydreamer and is sometimes confused with reality and fantasy. I think the biggest thing that bothered me was the writing style, I know I said I like the narration of Alice, but while reading, the style is sometimes isn’t working. It doesn’t flow smoothly I think it’s just me, but I don’t like stories written in second person with present tense.
But, I must say, I adore who you incorporated classic literature in this, like Dante’s work.
"The world is a lie. This is the afterlife, Limbo, Purgatory, Hell, Heaven, Valhalla..." Kissing oblivion, feeling its cold edges pressed against my body, that overwhelming darkness leering when I sleep or lie, like right now. And I’m in two minds.That is my favorite line in the entire story. Overall, I thought this story was such a difficult read, and hard to understand. I felt there was a lot to take in at one time and wasn’t clearly stated right. Your character Alice was my favorite and I loved how she thought about dreamed, but this story is not something I would read for fun, it wasn’t my cup of tea and it wasn’t exactly what I expected from the summary.
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Well, Audrey, shouldn't you get a fair review as well? Why aren't people skipping those stories, it's not fair to the person who is actually giving a decent review.
Please read and review the last chapter of
Neverland or the last chapter of
Sometime In April. Again the last chapter, I would like to be reviewed for both.