Unfair Essay For School; Please Review!

Hello, I need opinions for the essay I have writen that is due tommarrow; the topic is unfair. I need to know if I stayed on topic. All the things in '' are supposed to be in italics. Thank you if you review!

Unfair
By: Allie Mangus
Dedicated to: My grandmother and grandfather; and to anyone else who has lost, or is about to lose, someone they love dearly.


Have you ever lost someone, or are about to lose someone, you truly love? Whether it was from a health issue, like Diabetes or Cancer, a mistake, like drinking and driving, or from old age, just about all of us have lost someone we dearly love, and all of us thought the same thing, ‘it isn’t fair,’ and I agree; it isn’t fair. But as we have all been told life isn’t fair.
Death; that plain word can bring back a bad memory, everyone dies; whether we want to accept it or not everyone dies. But why? Christians and Catholics relate it back to what we learned from the Bible; Adam, Eve, and the Garden of Eden. Maybe; a non-religious person would relate it to everyone has a time to go and they have a reason as to why they have passed away. Myself, I relate it back to both of them; but my opinion is more religious. Sure Adam and Eve may have had something to do with people not living forever but, I believe God has some action, not all, to the way we pass away. But no matter which religion you are; you know what death is, and we all know it’s unfair.
On July,6,2009 it was a plain old summer day. Not having anything to do, watching re-runs of Sponge Bob Square Pants on the television. But, that day was a very bad day, the day my mom told our family that Grandma had End-Stage Pancreatic Cancer. That day many tears were shed it was hard to wrap my head around what my mom had told us, ‘she only has until Christmas; if that.’ That was the day it finally dawned on me; everyone passes away.
My grandma and I are very close. She has lived with my family for the past seven years, this May she had just moved down the street to my aunt’s house. I remember the days when she would take me to Waltham’s Corner Store and but scratch off lottery tickets. My grandma loved to cook and bake; I remember her teaching me how to bake. Well, she was attempting to at least. But I will always remember the memories we share together.
Now that our time together is shortened I needed to figure out a way to try to get rid of the pain, not to get depressed and mope. My grandma is almost as active as she always was, if you were an outsider looking in you would notice nothing wrong with her. But if she can keep herself busy when she has cancer, why can’t I get over it. So after a lot of thought I figured out a way to deal with it, listen to inspirational speeches, I know that sounds like a really silly thing to do; but it really helps. A speech I really love is the speech Nick Jonas says at concert before he plays his song, ‘A Little Bit Longer’ which is an inspirational song to begin with. What he says during the speech, ‘just promise me one thing; that never let the struggles of life slow you down,’ that line helped me realize that I can’t let things slow me down; sure this is a big thing. But, I can’t let it slow me down. People pass away, I’ll always have obstacles to hop over; but, I will always remember grandma in my heart. Grandma’s dying is bad, but she has lived a long 69 years; she proved Hospice wrong, they kept on shortening the time she has left down; according to them she was supposed to die weeks ago, but she is still here, and when it was time for her to go; I have to hold her hand, and tell her ‘it’s fine Grandma you’ll always be in my heart.’