new story.

Okay, so, I've been working on this story on and off. I like the idea and writing it has been fun.
You can read the first chapter here. Currently it has no title, so some title ideas would be great. Comments/reviews on it would be fabulous also. =] Like the author's note at the beginning says, it's a rough draft, so please don't get on my case about "oh there should be a comma here!" and stuff like that. I would just really like some peoples honest opinions on it. =]

So, enjoy!

-Mejen