could someone please.......

I know I'm gonna be a complete pain, but could someone please read and comment my story! i really need some advice!1
I entered it for a competition, but I'm not usre if it is good enough

Loosing Grace

If you do I would deeply appreciate it

besides that is it me or does mibba seem quiet lately? I mean it's probably cause I'm not on it as often, but people just don't seem as a chatty anymore. I miss the good old mibba days

PLUS

I swear there has been loads of fakes on this website! I was browsing the new members, and I saw four people claiming that their pictures were them when I genuinally know the pictures are from people I've seen on myspace.

seriously it's like we are not dumb!