help with story begining

Hey help me and comment !!!Please!! I need help with the beggining for a story i kind of got one i need to know if it catches any of you all attention.

I sit on the roof outside of my window to watch the sunrise and the rays reach me through the clouds on a monday morning the start of a new day at a new school.I get up and walk to my window and get in my room before my mom walks in telling me time to go catch the bus. Its the middle of the year so time to walk around not knowing where i am really going. But thankfully its my last time no more moving.

thats i got really give me suggestions tell me how i did and such.

i will apreciate it and thank you all.
September 14th, 2010 at 04:22pm