Comment swap ?

I have tried (and have probably failed) to write a proper story and I would really like some feedback on it. Its called "I'll tell him you're a hero".
I don't have any rules, I will read any story and comment back on the chosen story. I will read all of the story, unless it's 20 or more chapters.

I need another 52 words so I am gonna fill it up this is pointless sentence.
Hope you all having a good night :). I still need 28 words to fill this up, I am not going to rant but I can give good advice but never follow it myself :/