Comment Swap please +contest

I'm relatively new to mibba well maybe new is no longer a good word.... But I'm not getting many comments. I mean yeah I'm getting them but I am not liking them... Soooooo comment on my work? I'll be sure to return the favor. ^.^
All I get is criticism on my "overuse" of dialogue and how badly my characters are portrayed. Then again that id also my compliments so please if something else could be said..

And also I will give what I receive, keep that in mind.

Dialogue haters are not welcome.

I'm not sure about a contest yet.. Comment if interested. Once more than six I'll post it. Prizes would be decent comments without expecting them in ret