Comment Swap

Yep, The new story buzz.
This has been in my head for so long, so I decided to dump the first chapter on ya.

Sorry, it's a DBZ story, not GOT (But I can feel the swing coming back for that, so don't stress)
It would mean a lot to me if you could give it a read.

So, as the title suggests, it's up for a comment swap.
I only want feedback on this story currently.
The story is: Spectrum.
It is A/U, so you don't need to know anything about the characters - So you can pretend it's an original if you like. It doesnt phase me. But it would seriously mean so much to me if you could give it a read and a comment, it's only just over 600 words, so it's not long yet.

I'm willing to swap for any one-shot, but I'd prefer original (dark themed or not.)
I'll give you an in depth comment back on it, and it can be any length so put a link in your comment here and I'll check it out ASAP.

Also: Side note. I'm going to be streaming tonight, if anybody wants to watch that. I'll be doing LAN party with my boyfriend and best friend, playing Borderlands 2 most likely - So if you want to hear my voice in all it's offensive glory, we'll be streaming via his channel on Twitch (so the camera will be on him - sorry, haha). I'll set up a hosting thing on my Twitch channel so you can see it via there though, the link is: UpfrontBeast605

We'll probably be live at like 12ish our time, so in about two hours. So Feel free to pop into the channel and have a watch - I apologize for my swearing and general uselessness.