song writing

right you have all seen this sad excuse of a poem, but ithink with your lots help it could be turn into a passable song. i wopuld like critisisum and advice? that mean u to danyelle!

(verse 1)
The road is so wet, the road is dark
Way back then i needed your heart,
I gave you mine but you broke it apart,
You may think i am smiling,
But on the inside i cry and i bleed,

(verse 2)
I am alone, its begining to snow,
Lifes no longer needed,
Just there to be loathed,
I will never go home to that dusty abode,

(Chorus)
If you ever feel torn apart and you've stopped and you can't start,
Let me carry on and break the night soon they'll be here to stop the fight,
If they ever try to break you down just know that it will be fine,
In the end we'll just pretend It's alright.