The Ballet - Comments

criticism: In the second line don’t use a semicolon it should be “Suspended—high-wire, acrobatic flight.” or you can just replace the semicolon with the word in. I also don’t quite agree with “antique black” I don’t know if antique is the right word to use for a night sky. And grammatically, take away the semi colon on your second to last line.

compliments: This is so beautiful. The metaphor is apt and the imagery justtakes me away to your winter wonderland. I absolutely adore it. My favorite line might be “Balletic poetry, read with silent sound”. But the whole poem is just amazing. You’ve got great talent never stop writing. Love this ♥

This is great.
It flows well and you use the language amazingly to paint pictures of the snowflakes' beauty and making the reader feel like they're really there. Great job.

I am judging for the contest :D And wow, this is an amazing poem. Really well written and the rhyme sounds perfect! It easily makes me imagine the beautiful scene and your grammer and spelling seems to be perfect too. You didn't break any rules as far as I know. This is great, well done!

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This is gorgeous =D You depict a beautiful scene :)

Wow this is beautiful..it paints such a pretty picture..i love it.

this is just...beautiful. I love it, it's amazing(: great job!

wow...this is actually very, very good
it made me imagine the whole scene:)