Ok, I'm sorry to be negative and all here but this sort of sounds like a screaming toddler to me. the first 20 and last 22 lines sound like a belligerent child. Of course I've never been much of a fan of exclamation points either for some reason. Those 11 lines in the middle are the best part for me.
I know it seems otherwise but I don't really like being so mean. Just though you might want to know. And even if this was written by a child it's a child that has great rhyming abilities and knows how to make things flow beautifully
It does kind of sound like a song because of the repetition.
I really liked this though, as the comment before me said, it was very powerful.
Your choice of words was very good.
Great job! (:
This is a very powerful.poem. It's also very lyric, and I think that's what really drew me in. I love your choice of words and the repitition really gives it an edge. Good job.
Okay, I agree, it sort of reminds me of a song; a very amazing song, at that. I love the significance of your words. The way you have them all melded together in a nice and steady beat that flows so easily through my mind. It gives me hope that maybe, just maybe, I can stop trying to be who my mother wants me to be. Thank you once again for another beautiful song/poem! <3