Part 2: Tracing Hearts - Comments

  • joyofthekill

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    I think this is good, you capture all the senses of the feeling your trying to convey in the poem. It's descriptive, and lovely, but one thing I'll pick about is the rhythm. To me it doesn't sound so rhythmic and thats a vital key in poetry..
    September 23rd, 2012 at 07:32pm
  • Maggie_gaga0_0

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    Aweh, this is adorable.
    sometimes it's hard to let the words "i love you" come out, but they will eventually and it's so special.

    this one made me smile! Great work :)

    If you have a chance come check out some of my poems and leave me a comment! I'd really appreciate it! :)
    September 23rd, 2012 at 06:33pm