Suffocation - Comments

mymomislysolcrazy (105)

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@ Kallik
Thanks :)

October 7th, 2012 at 11:01pm

mymomislysolcrazy (105)

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@ onlythegooddieyoung
Thank you, I corrected it :)

October 7th, 2012 at 11:00pm

Kallik (500)

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Really sad and dark, yet beautifully written :) Loved it! :D

October 6th, 2012 at 05:12am

onlythegooddieyoung (100)

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Oh my God, this poem was so, like, dark. But it was absolutely fabulous. The words were absolutely perfect. Fantastic job!

My only complaint is that in the first line in the second stanza, "Breathes" should be "breaths." But other than that, totally flawless and awesome. :D

October 6th, 2012 at 04:39am