Roses In Water - Comments

  • Xx2PoisonKissesxX

    Xx2PoisonKissesxX (100)

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    i really like this poem i like the ending
    July 2nd, 2008 at 05:17pm
  • LiSwtSLaS

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    Good. I like the end it gives a good sense of finality the only thing you may want to change is the one line "turn the water deep". The word "turn" doesn't exactly fit in there if you used a thesaurus to change it to something like, "make the water deep" it might sound a bit better.
    July 1st, 2008 at 02:17am