Death - Comments

this exact thing happened to me. I was about five and my great grandma died. it was really tragic for the whole family and it was the first death i'd ever heard of. back then i didnt understand that grandma was gone, it never really triggered in my head. but i know i cryed a lot. something about death to me was really intense

[color=#9735BE][b] whoa thats good but who died[/b][/color]

This is an awesome poem!!!
You should beieve in yourself more seriously>
But you did ask for advice-
So: all im gonna say is, read through it after you wrote it and correct any typos-
on one of your last lines you went 'also so'. Were you meant to do that?
If you like it- others are bound to like it- exspecially because you are your own worst enemy. You will only see the bad in what you do. Hope that helps ;)

Gnarly Poem.