nice poem, it has a good story and impact , excuse the pun lol the only thing that i wasnt to keen on was the rhythem of the poem and how it flowed, like i wasnt sure how it was spose to be read, sorry if this offends u :/ i just try to give useful advice coz i like it coz i think it helps me improve xD
April 18th, 2009 at 01:51am
