October 7th, 2007 at 03:53am
From reading quickly through the first chapter, I have this to say:
You write excellently and set the scene very well. My only qualm is that it was somewhat rushed- maybe there could have been a little more on the characters? I laughed at the "mugged victim" retort. You have a gift for spinning words. Keep it up :D
like i said before, far from crap.