So first off i said the minimum was 500 words, there was no max of words, so you could have added as much as you wanted! You really should do this agian if you want and let the words keep coming! This was very well done and it fits really well with the song, having both happiness and saddness.
This was pretty good, it had a lot of potential to be an amazing story. It's a shame about the word limit because it kind of made things move really suddenly but it was really enjoyable!
Awwwww! This was a nice, cute little one-shot to start of my day! It's difficult to keep to a 500 word boundary, but you managed to fit a lot in, which is good. I wasn't expecting the little twist at the end, but I liked it. You left the reader feeling happy about Gerard and Frank admitting thier feelings towards one another, but then suddenly you took those pleasant feelings away, which was a sad, but well thought out way to end the story.
Just one thing: 'I laid my hand on the back of his neck and treaded my fingers in his soft black locks.' Shouldn't that be 'threaded'?
Well done. Good luck with the contest :]
June 18th, 2009 at 10:48am
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