This was written beautifully. You should definately build it up from here and continue, you know already three people want to read more. Great job with this.
Hmm, how can I say I really liked this without sounding like a perv? Well, I thought it was quite fabulous! It left me wanting to know what would happened next. Is she a vampire now? What is Gerard going to do when he wakes up? Anyway, good job!
Great job with this.