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  • katelyn;

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    love how you preface it by saying He was David Blaise, and he was going to change my life.
    i really like this line, it's very well written: We always woke up at 7:30, as expected. We always met up at 2 in the morning, just by chance. it fits really well with the whole but it's 2 AM and I'm too high and dry and i won't come down soon from the song.
    i also like how you incorporated the whole don't speak liar thing to him asking about the kiss.

    but my favorite part is the ending, We were sitting back, just sitting back on the weird couch cushions, falling in love. loved it.

    overall. i really liked it. you did a good job.
    September 3rd, 2009 at 05:52am
  • orlando weeks.

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    whoa.
    that was so adorable.
    seriously, the ending was perfect and I love the way you wrote this.
    so cute.
    :tehe:
    August 26th, 2009 at 06:36am
  • stay awake;

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    That was adorable. It was also very well written. :]
    I really liked the idea of this, I don't know why I just do.
    August 19th, 2009 at 07:45pm
  • myperfectsonnet

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    Since I proofread it I got to read it before everyone else. So I get to comment first! I ADORED IT SO FREAKING MUCH. God. It was so well written <3
    August 19th, 2009 at 02:47am
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