White Room - Comments

this story was very captivating and i was hooked. poor britney. but i can only feel sorry for david. hes just so oblivious and doesnt even know hes hurting people. wonderful story. can we expect more soon?

Awww, poor David <3
This is totally awesome!

It's really good, I'm absolutely loving it! :D David is a little creepy, but I understand where he's coming from, I guess. But holy cow..."I wasn't finished. Mwahahahaha!" okay, there was no evil laugh, but in my mind there was. xP
Anyway, keep up the excellent work. I'd love to read more. :)
Also, I can't wait to see David (if he gets the chance) mingle with other patients.

a little freaky [no offense] but it sticks w/ ya and that proves good writing is involved.pretty cool

That was....amazing!
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Lovely chapter. :)
I love how David is so oblivious to everything the man was saying to him; didn't like that the man was so cruel with David. :(
It's cute how David has this all in his head. <3
Can't wait to see what happens next!

More soon?

Oh my goodness! I actually started to write a story (which I wanted to make a series) called the White Room Chronicles. It was about a girl with depression who was hospitalized. I never finished it because I got bored, but anyway, yeah. Sorry, I just had to say that cuz of the title. I didn't read it, cuz I'm tired, but I'm going to read it later and comment again about the actual writing. Yeah. :)

This is very interesting. The main character does act very childish, but this may be because of his evident insanity (it would be very interesting if the main character were an adult). I immediately felt a sense of connection and sympathy with the character, and I am definately hooked. This story, unlike many, has many paths it could go down. Good luck and I will subscribe! I'm definately hooked!

Aww, poor little David. <3

This story has a wonderful start. :D I'm hooked.
You introduced the main characters strongly. :)
David seems like a lovely boy. :P

More soon? :D