Hauntings In Her Dreams - Comments

  • colibri

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    Your writing is actually really amazing. The grammar is a bit messy in some places, but this is from a year ago, so it may not be how you write now. I love it though. It's sad, and I didn't expect the ending, but that's good. I like surprises in stories.
    This was a good one-shot.

    Have a good day.
    April 17th, 2011 at 05:47pm
  • Artemis Love

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    Wow, I really loved it
    It was written really well and it was quite depressing
    I love the twist you put it into it.
    April 8th, 2010 at 02:55am
  • DragonxFox

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    That's so depressing.
    Lol, it was well written, though. But still, how sad *sniffles*
    February 7th, 2010 at 11:00pm
  • pezzie

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    Aww.
    This is really good.
    I loved it.
    January 23rd, 2010 at 08:04pm
  • toxic infatuation.

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    The beginning was strong, the middle started to lose me but the end brought me back.
    December 29th, 2009 at 01:28am
  • solovely;

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    The summary drew me in first. And I really liked the whole story. It was greatly detailed and conveyed the emotions. I felt like I was there.
    December 22nd, 2009 at 02:46am
  • mr. owl

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    What really drew me in was the summary to this. And the fact that she just seems to think she is dead throughout the whole one shot it just intriguing. Most people convey this in their one shots, but they never follow through with it like you did.

    Argh! What? What the hell is Filipe doing there? No! D:

    Okay, usually I can't stand one shots that are just dreams. But I think this was the perfect ending for this story, mainly because it seemed so dream like. It was way too incredible that he showed up out of nowhere, so it was only fair that this was a dream.

    Amazing job. I don't think I've seen a dream used right before.
    December 22nd, 2009 at 02:31am
  • BeggingForChanges

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    I liked this, a lot. Jamie's emotions seemed deep, not the shallow ones normally found in one-shots. If you ever post a chaptered story, let me know?
    December 20th, 2009 at 01:39am
  • X...x

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    This is a great one-shot, I couldn't stop reading because I always wanted to know what was going to happen... especially with Filipe appeared, I was like 'no... that can't be him...' but even though deep inside i knew he wasn't there, the story and description was really good that i had to keep reading. great job on this! :)
    December 19th, 2009 at 06:11pm
  • Fangs Up.

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    Wow, This was fucking amazing!
    Like, I was like OMG The whole way through. I cant beleive he would do that to Jamie :|
    That was so sad. I wonder if it was actualy a dream or not ..:| Hmm
    Nut anyway to the point. This was amazing (: I really like this (:
    Well done (:
    December 15th, 2009 at 09:07pm
  • lions

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    That was amazing, but really sad. Your really great at describing things, but I have to say I was thinking New Moon the whole time I was reading, but you're still an awesome writer.
    December 14th, 2009 at 02:40am
  • harris.

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    Even though it was written in third person, it was so easy to empathize with Jamie. I thought it was a dream when I was reading it, when I actually found out it was, it was almost heart breaking. You did an amazing job being descriptive, this is amazing.
    There were a couple of spelling errors, but other than that, it was great. You're incredibly talented.
    December 14th, 2009 at 02:18am
  • MadNinjaSkillz!

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    that was really good i liked it :)
    December 14th, 2009 at 02:15am
  • volta.

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    I really liked that :]
    There are a few minor word errors and all that, but it was a really good read.
    I liked the twist, and everything.
    December 14th, 2009 at 02:11am