Guitar - Comments

Awesome! :) I like it. (Plus, I like to listen to Tom Petty as well.) Very brilliant and creative as well. :)

One Shot for One Shot:

I really like the language in this. It's simple and it works so well. I like that there's an air of mystery around it- around who he is, who she is and where they're going once the story's finished. It's like a small moment captured in time. The fact that there's so much still left to find out makes it all the more interesting.

My only criticism would be the repetition of the word 'he' at the beginning of the sentences, but that didn't lessen the impact for me really.

For such a short story, it says quite a lot.

I liked the unexpected action of her.

Bah! This was absolutely beautiful and simple and I loved it. It was so mysterious and I want to know more, and yet the details that were provided made it all seem so real. Good job. :D

The way he can feel the guitars effects before even holding it... it's beautiful, the way you put it.
It's also interesting how he has never held a guitar before--
I mean, in this strange way, it illuminates just how badly he wants that guitar.

The woman adds a mysterious air to it all, of course. Your description skills are great, and as you explained what she wore, and how she looked, a perfect image of her blew up in my mind.
In my opinion, there wasn't a thing wrong with this piece. The wording was just right, and I could even feel myself wanting that guitar in the beginning.
You did a great job.

I thought it was cute :)

Let me start off with, this wasn't at all what I was expecting.
I was expecting a story about someone playing and they had this amazing thing happen to them while doing so, but this was completely different, and I was surprised the entire time I was reading this because of that.
I liked it a lot, because I can relate to it a lot, and I love how the woman just goes and buys the guitar for him without a word. The end left me wondering, and it was one impactful story for just 211 words.
The beginning was my favourite part, the wording set up the story perfectly without giving away anything that was going to happen just a few paragraphs afterwards.
'Tis a lovely story dear.

Erm okay story.