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please finish this!! i wona see where it goes :D

please finish this!! i wona see where it goes :D

this sounds cool!

i like chapter two, it was good :D

I have to agree for the emotions that the mum and daughter have. It's weird unless the mum killed her husband lol. And you want to add more fun part to your prologue as to what may happen, perhaps, a boyfriend? her mother died? then end the prologue so that people will be more interested to your story.

i liked it! sure it could of have had a little bit more detail but its only a prologue, maybe its short because it has something to do with whats going to happen later on in the story, right??
well any ways it was good even though it was short, but thats a good thing if you write something short and its still good, i wish i was like that, i jus posted a new chapter for my story and its really long lol

plz continue ur story!!

I'm not really good at giving constructive criticism but... I just think that they take his death a bit calmly. I mean Emily and her mom did cry and all, but when Emily's mom woke her up, I think any woman would panic if they found their husband on the floor with a bloody knife and would probably scream and have no time to go to her daughter's room and whisper her to wake up...
But actually, it's probably me, you should add a little bit more details :) it helps the readers picture what's really happening, but so far I like the story :D You should continue it!