(I wasn't sure which story you wanted commented, the journal didn't say so...) But this short description is what pulled me in, and I'm seriously glad I read this. It was unbelievably written, and the descriptions flowed very nicely. It was easy to picture everything. The plot of this is great, and I can't wait to see where this goes. 3:
It's different, but I like it. It was written really well. You did a great job of describing everything. You made it easy to picture what was going on.
That was written wonderfully; I feel the urge to shudder. You really captured her horror of her reaction when she saw the bones in the ground. The description was good--perhaps a little more imagery would be nice. "My dreams crawled with dark images of bones and crows." -Brilliant cliff hanger/place to leave it.
I love this. I could imagine everything so clearly in my mind. The emotion and descriptions were done so well. I love the title. This should have way more comments on it, it's so good. :3 Well done!
You’re really setting this up for such an incredible story, I really can’t wait to see where you take it. I love horror stories, especially haunted houses, so this is right up my alley. And from all of my past readings, I know that finding a pile of bones is always a bad omen. (even if it was only a deer :D)
All I think could be done better is the descriptions. You might be rushing some parts a bit. For instance, elaborate a little on the bones she dug up. What did they say to each other when they found it? How big was it? What condition were they in? You know, just little things like that. <3
Woah. This actually freaked me out. D: Like breezy; said -- I think it's a person. I love your pieces -- I think you're one of the best writers on this site. [: Great job! <3
Nice. I liked that it was a dear, and not a human. It would have been too predictable if it was a person. Kelly, you're so awesome. Have a good day! ^^
But this short description is what pulled me in, and I'm seriously glad I read this.
It was unbelievably written, and the descriptions flowed very nicely. It was easy to picture everything.
The plot of this is great, and I can't wait to see where this goes. 3: