Affliction - Comments

love it:)

i'm not really into suicide stories but this one really stands out, you've used a different context to others and you haven't made it so 'emo', if you get what i mean.
it's really good, it's got a great cliffhanger.
keep it up.

I love how you used a color as the girls name; it's pretty. Also, I love how you used pills as the enemy, and not a razor.

The only thing I didn't like was that you kind of left the readers hanging, and you didn't have much detail, but you did have a lot of emotion. You had a few mistakes, so you might want to check over that.

Other than that, it was lovely. :)