I really like this, its cute and warm and totally a fairy tale. But theres like no conflict. I think you should try to add some type of conflict. <3 :)
Okay this is really weird but I just read chapter one and I was listening to Take Me On The Floor by the Veronicas at the same time!!!! How strange is that??? Love the story so far by the way! Good work. :)
This was so cute. I could totally see chelsey getting all sexy died and then kane, sharpie and swabs walking in. Great update and srry for commenting so late