Whisperwhisperwhisper. - Comments

  • waves wash

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    I liked it. It had something about it
    August 7th, 2011 at 10:34pm
  • desiher

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    wow. This was... amazing. simple as that.
    Beautiful.
    March 31st, 2011 at 01:41am
  • Little

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    Your descriptive language is perfect. I felt like I could really picture everything you wrote. It is written beautifully and is basically just an all round beautiful piece of writing.
    December 6th, 2010 at 05:58am
  • youngbae.

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    asdkghalisuerhg. I adore this! <3

    It's written beautifully, and how it's uncapitalized helps it flow better, I think. You painted the feeling in my head, and I felt like I knew what you were talking about. The last paragraph is amazing, and I just want to quote everything. tehe

    Beautiful, m'dear. <3
    December 6th, 2010 at 04:33am
  • Bottled Hollywood

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    Wow.
    That's really all I can say.
    It's been a very long time since I have read something I enjoyed this much in this way.
    My favorite line was, "careful murmurs of sex and prejudice would dance in your mind with the simplest of ideas." I just love the way it was worded.
    The way this was set up also was amazing. The simple blocks of text all unicode and not capitalized. The whole piece flowed without any interruptions, just like the story itself; it all was a conscious flow of thoughts. I also liked how the background was simple and just allowed to the story to shine on its own.
    This story really was lovely, and has got to be one of my favorite drabbles/short stories thus far.
    December 6th, 2010 at 04:29am
  • winterfell.

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    I honestly love this. It's not often that I see uncapitalized stories pulled off, but the lack of capitalization really worked for this one.
    The sensation of the whispers is described wonderfully as well. Not even just the whispers, but the whole feeling that you capture here. You never flat out say what it is, but it's so vivid, and I can know exactly what you're talking about. I really love the imagery in this too, the descriptions are quite unique.
    I was going to quote my favorite part, but then I realized that it would involve quoting the whole second paragraph, although I adore the last sentence as well. I just love the words you chose, how you arranged your description and put everything in an order that keeps on hitting the reader with another wave of realization as to what you're getting at in the story. This is lovely.
    December 6th, 2010 at 04:21am