Right Here With My Friends - Comments

I feel the need to quickly point out that you shouldn't have the lyrics in the first chapter. Chapters should be used solely for your own writing, and not song lyrics. Also, you shouldn't have links to outfits and stuff like that in the main body of text, those should be left in the author's note. I just thought I'd quickly let you know!

Story-wise, this is pretty solid. Domestic abuse is quite a taboo subject, but you've approached it with a really good angle and I like how you have Krysta being all secretive about Matt right from the get-go. You really do show how scared she is right up until the very moment that she confronts him. It's also nice to see a character with some courage, speaking up for herself after a long time of torment. It shows that she has two sides: one weak that didn't say it before and one strong that is finally standing up for herself. In that way, I think you see her flaws and it stops her from being a complete Mary Sue, which is something that a lot of people spiral into when dealing with this sort of subject matter. I'd definitely be interested in seeing where you take this, it seems like an interesting idea and you've left it at a cliffhanger!

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I really liked this! Which is something I don't say often seeing as a lot of people have mass amounts of spelling and grammar errors which is a pet peeve of mine! Anyway, I enjoyed this and I can't wait to read more!!

Jimmy is amazing in this story. Dimples, dimples, who would be? I think this one of the best stories so far and I can see that you put alot of time and work into it. Congratz for all the hard work and keep this coming for us :D

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I love this <3

I hadn't noticed you had this up. :D
Great job!! <3