Fairy Tale - Comments

Wham! Bam! Thank you ma'am!

I love this, though I am a few chapters in. If I had more energy I would be finishing this now. I am so stoked to read this! I'm always taken back by your writing skill. I just have so many feels, for you.

Sooo I read through all of this, exploded into a burning volcano of love for it, then went back to the first chapter and clicked through to click on all the outfits again. I had a blast clicking through the outfits again.

more!

aww. I love it! :D

i love it.....ik i havent shared my love recently but i honestly love this one of my favorites keep up the gud work.....*claps*

The pictures showing their clothes and etc. :)

It's adorable. :) Although it would be better if you'd leave out the pictures, you know, it's just..yeah, I can't explain it.

awwww adorable georgs jealous how cute...plz update more plz

i love it.....super kawaii update soon

i love it update soon

Hi guys. There is a good story in here that will really shine with some going over and fixing up some spelling and punctuation. I also found that there was a lot of explaining and backstory which got in the way of me getting really hooked in. A lot of this backstory can be saved for later on in your story - your job with the first chapter is to just get the reader hooked in. Try to pare it down to the most action you can.

I like how there wasn't a lot of messing around between the funeral and going to Germany. It's obvious that is where the real story is going to unfold and I think you've been right in thinking that you should get the reader there as soon as possible.

All the best with it. Thanks for sharing!