Falling in Love for Real - Comments

Lol I'm not doing that on purpose. I'm from texas so that's how I talk but I'll focus on that. I didn't even notice I was doing that

Getting better but btw you are giving the boys southern accents I know it's not on purpose people write how they talk so not a big deal but the guys dont say y'all cause they are Cali boys not gonna lie tho only reason I notice is because I'm nit used to ppl saying y'all but other than that its good :)

much better you brought the guys in :D thank you can't wait for more :)

its good just your chapters are short and since a-dub is a good chunk of the story is going to be about (i assume) I suggest you put them in there soon :) otherwise ppl may lose interst (i won't but i know ppl who will)

nice!
But... Uhhh, it's noticable that you're just starting out. I just suggest using paragraphs and stuff! Give detail!!
My stories aren't the best, but maybe check them out for any kind of design for the writing. Otherwise, keep on writing! I started out like this!