The Tracks of My Tears - Comments

UPDATE LIKE NOW PLEASE!!

haha ^^^
okay, this was good, i completely forgot what i was going to say about Chapter 2.....
So, spelling and punctuation.
OH! YES!
You don't have to put a * in fuck.
look.
Fuck fuck fuck, fuckity fuck fuck.
It's the internet. Even if you're thirteen years old, if you are writing an R rated story you are allowed to say fuck.
Also, instead of capitalizing your emphasis words, italicize them. you make brackets [] and put an i in them. when you are done italicizing, make brackets [] and put /i in them.
more BBcodes are found in the forum. The easiest way to get to them is to go to your About Me section, go down to BBcodes, and click on the link.
Simple as that. Hope this helped.

i agree with Smile.In.The.Rain fuck all of them!

^^^^ Woah. weird.
Nice so far, im only on the first chapter still.
Deep down i'm still a hardcore Jonas Brother fan, and even though i'm supposed to be off, I'm staying up to read this.
And FYI I'm not a big fan of the sex and stuff, cause I'm also a hardcore believer in the 'No Jonas Sex' scheme, i just completely made that up BTW, but theyve all got purity rings... well two of them do, and its just... yeah.
so... yeah.
It's still good though. I think you do have a lot os mispelling, and you have little use of commas and correct punctuation. Do a little work on that and it would be perfect.

Fuck Nick, Kevin, Katie, Mr. Jay, Mrs. Jay (Kinda ) and Danielle (Kinda)

I hate Nick and Katie! Joe better be hurting! ALOT!