Thanks For The Good Time - Comments

  • chemicalkid101

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    The way you write is just amazing!. One of the best waycest's I've read in a long time <3
    May 17th, 2011 at 06:01pm
  • sashasaurasrex

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    Lol, don't ever say that again, because she is BEAST when it comes to waycest.
    April 12th, 2011 at 05:18pm
  • Mikey'sWay

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    This was sexy. By sexy i mean holy fuck damn shit. Micheal James Way is myabsolute favorite waycest writer on mibba and i have to say, you give her a run for the money. I so fucking love when mikey is in control.
    April 12th, 2011 at 05:41am
  • zombie heart

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    OMG Gerard was a ladyXD Thats awesome. Love this story:)
    April 6th, 2011 at 07:11am
  • sashasaurasrex

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    I appreciate it, and yeah, it is a one shot. I've got other stories I write, and this was just a way to get a sex scene out of my system :] That's why it starts so slow and "disjointed" as you said - I tried to make it somewhat long. Thank you for reading, though, and especially thanks for the crit.
    April 6th, 2011 at 07:00am
  • Rachelish

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    Comment Virginity STOLEN :)

    Seriously, I love the way you write. I can understand why you wrote in third person, so you don't personalize either character too much and for this story it is appropriate but the story should possibly start with the bar scene, having so many paragraphs of saying 'The man did this' and 'The man did that' is disjointed. It's hard to write from third person perfectly.

    I was also *pleasantly* surprised that Mikey was the demon, rather then Gerard, as is the norm with most stories.

    I dunno if this is a one-shot but please write more!
    April 6th, 2011 at 06:49am