Salvation - Comments

WOW! your smut was nicely done with just the right amount of risque bits to make it feel a bit dirty, but not TOO dirty. You have a talent for smut (can you feel my jealousy?) and I hope you continue this, I would like to see where it goes! well done. :)

Oh my god, the description, the sensory details, reading this almost stopped my heart. I have NEVER read smut like this before, it was so beautifully written and well crafted, you definitely have a raw talent and it makes me jealous! Keep writing lovely you just gained a subscriber. (I don't usually read smut but the writing in this is so incredible I couldn't resist.)

Woah there! You actually made me blush! I'm not used to reading smut at all so I don't really know how to 'review' it. But I know that I liked the dialogue very much and felt like it was very well written. I thought you wrote good descriptions - even though they made my cheeks burn. Good job!

It's very well written, the characters seem to hold their own personalities well even within a short amount of time. The last part where it's about Draco is definitely stirring up curiosity about why he has an issue with water I have to admit.

I don't quite like harry potter. But I definitely was not expecting what I read! It was very good though, and descriptive. Not something I'd think about going along with harry potter characters, anywho. I also really like your layout. Good job, keep writing xx! :)

This is really descriptive, which was good. I've never been one for smut, though it doesn't make me uncomfortable per se, so I was kind of disappointed by the lack of other content, but it was rather good for what it was. The wording is very food, though at times it does feel a little bit...pretentious? Like, sometimes it does have a bit of a thesaurus feeling to it. Other than that, this is interesting. I like it. :)

That was painful to read. Not because it was bad. It was quite well written. Just painful in a tragical sense. Your writing style flows well. I hope Draco saves her or something along those lines. Good job doll :)

I was so not expecting that. But you wrote it beautifully. I just love nicely written smut - though I wish the actual sex was more drawn out. It seems as if as soon as it starts, it is over. I just imagine that he would have taken longer with his sex slave? Don't know. But this was great. Keep it up!

An interesting story for sure. Your dialogue is good between the characters, and your detail was very descriptive. . You have a talent at writing though and I like the writing style and story. Well done! Keep up the great work!

Updating soon?

Wow. Okay so I know this was meant to be a comment swap, but I dont actually know what to say. I've actually never read something like this, its very...sexual. And being inexperienced in that area, all I can say is erm..it was good? very descriptive lol. (Yes I'm blushing. Silly me)

Wow. That was... very Lucius. I've never really thought about him too much, but this really opened my eyes. You really brought his personality front and center, and I really hope that Draco isn't scarred for life, poor thing.

I think the tone was well done, the situation plausible.

I'm interested in seeing where this story is going. I hope you update soon.

Well if you want success, sex is the best way to go. I'm not a big fan of the Harry Potter franchise so I don't know much of the 'deeper meaning'. I am curious to how Draco had this 'vision' and the first chapter sparks enough curiosity for people to want to continue.

Wow...that's mostly all I can say. I love how descriptive it is! Some aparts seemed poetic to me,I love that! Your writing style is magnificent! I thought it was amazing all up. Keep up the great work. :)

This story is good, not only because of good grammar, but it's not overly dramatic like alot of sex slaved stories. It reminds me of Eminem songs which make me love it, and since it's a Malfoy fic makes me love it more...

Like his rose, I didn't know it was a HP fic until then either. a few good points:
From a writing standpoint, you have talent. Your sentences are well written, and I found you were able to invoke all the right emotions while I read it. I'm not a fan of fanfics, usually, but great job.
A point of concern:
Its a bit difficult on the eyes that your background and text are both dark colors.

I'm not a writing genius, but I do know you have talent. :D you did a very good job with this chapter. I actually felt myself being disgusted because of what Lucius did to her. I do have one suggestion though. Don't stop writing.

Oh my. I will say that this is my first reaction. I didn't realize that this was a Harry Potter fic until you mentioned Crucio and Lucius. Though I have a feeling this will be very twisted. The layout is nice and simple which I like. Though I would advise adding a space in between paragraphs because it will make it easier to read and a little less intimidating to readers. I wish you luck with your story!

i like it and cant wait for a new update u did good graphicking