Good story plot, but the writing is all OVER the place, and isn't spaced out well, and makes it hard to read. And alot of the things happening in the story happen so fast, its reallyyy confusing. Like how you're one second reading email because you can't sleep, then shes going to get in trouble for something then you jump over the fence back to your room and get in bed? Where the hell was she? lol. Just need to be more specific about whats happening, and slow it down some to make it a more enjoyable read. All together, good story, great plot.
October 12th, 2011 at 10:24pm
