I just wanted to say that your descriptions are fantastic, I'm so jealous :) I really liked how you launched in with the descriptions, for me that immediately captures my attention and I'm liking the developing relationship between Ryan and Brendon, it's sweet. The dialogue is also really natural and I can totally imagine people talking like that in real life. I think it did move a bit too fast in some areas especially when they were confessing their attraction for each other but oh well. Good luck with with your story.