Your Pain Is What We Desire - Comments

The title of your story is really good, I like it a lot but when I opened this story the layout let you down a little. When you have dialogue you don't space it out from your paragraphs and occasionally your grammar is a bit off.

I find it a bit bizarre how she's been sent to a boarding school for people who behave really badly behaved yet she isn't that badly behaved at all and neither are the rest of the students. People have done worse at my school and that was just your normal English school and I'd expect things to be worse in America for some reason.

A side from the that the idea is alright, though it has been done many times before and you do have potential to be a very good writer as your writing style is clear and uncomplicated though you do sometimes have a little too much talking.

Dude, awesome story haha. The only problem I had was that it wasn't very realistic, but I guess that's the point right? (; It was good over all. You chose some attractive characters, lol. I respect that. I respect that a lot. Anyways, comment swap brought me here. :D Keep writing, girly. it's GOOOOOOOOD.

I love it!

Haha you know i LOVED it!!! :D

I like how they all get along with each other. It was cute to know that Syn was on a date with Charlie.

Oh crap busted
That was GREAT
I loved it
Can't wait for more
Update soon

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This is funny. I like it so far. Right now Matt is my favorite person and Jimmy too. I just really like how pissy Matt is.

This. is. AMAZING! You friggin GENUS! =D