The Memoir of Irene Parsons - Comments

*Comment swap brought me here.
When I first started reading this I thought, 'Oh no is this going to be one of those mess-with-your-mind stories?' But I loved your writing style, so I figured 'why not just give it a go?' And here I am. I must say, I loved what I've just read. This was so mysterious and intriguing. I agree with the comments below, the Comic Sans is kind of difficult to read. Though I do like the rest of your theme. So brownie points for that! Overall I really enjoyed this and I can't wait to read more!

Comment swap brought me here. I'd have to agree with the person below, Comic Sans is incredibly hard on the eyes so that was a bummer, but it's an easy fix if you'd like. Other than that, the first chapter is intriguing. Sometimes the word choice was a bit screwy, but other than that I really enjoyed it. Good job!

Comic sans is a rather irritating font to read with, to be honest. I'd suggest changing it to something nicer and more professional looking. Other than that, your layout was alright.

I felt there was too much dialogue, and not enough description. Dialogue is fine and all, but picturing scenes is a wonderful way to draw readers into a story. Still, your grammar is fine, and your story is beginning to get interesting... I may read further, if I have time later. Good luck!

-Joe

You know I actually enjoy this story. A good read doesnt have to be bam right in your face when it first starts.Theres a pyramid for a reason. If you can wrap your head around the layout of the story it isnt a bore. Its actually rather interesting and I am curious to see how the characters/plot develops. Keep writingggg!

I only read the first and second chapter, as a heads up.
I found it a little boring, I just can't seem to get my head around the story, sorry to say.
Your writing style is descriptive, in a good way, but I think it just drags the story on a little bit.

At first, i thought this story would get a bit boring and it sounded a little old but as soon as i read the first chapter, i was hooked. Your technique is amaze, its unique and fits the story perfectly. Plus the layout is great too so i think you should carry on:)

Personally this story isn't my cup of tea and if i was just scrolling mibba i would have skipped it. But i do have to say that your style is writing is nice, descriptive and well written though your chapters could probably benefit from being a little longer :)

i'm not a big fan of this, to be honest. your description doesn't flow naturally to me, and something about it sort of just doesn't work. it's awkward. the second chapter i a bit better, but i don't really understand why someone's looking for her if she's taken off on purpose? i mean, i dunno. it's not bad, but i think your writing style just isn't something that my brain meshes with well, sorry!

First- I love the layout, it's really awesome, and makes reading more enjoyable.

Second- I like the summary, it gives us a taste if your writing skills.

Third- I'm not a fan of your chapter names, they start off good then it just repeats... try something new, perhaps?

Fourth- The third chapter was absolutely awesome. I loved it. Keep up your writing and never give up.

You ned to update Please =)

Adam scares me... he's just a creep. :)
Great job!

AWESOME! I love it. Update soon!

Definitely love this. And your layout is gorgeous. Keep it up:)

I LOVE THIS!!!!I'm totally subscribing!

I am loving this so far <3