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  • Fear and Anger

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    *insert shitty twin telepathy joke here and over theeeeeeeeeeere*
    Ya know, this is the first one I find worth favoriting/alerting/saving/whateverthefuck. I don't even know what it's called. But I'll do it!
    April 10th, 2014 at 02:29am
  • Barbielovesyou

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    lol, that's how you say hello Mikey? seriously?? Lol!! Love it! Continue the update! ^_^
    February 23rd, 2013 at 04:05am
  • SquiddyTheMouse

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    I love this so much <3 please update soon :)
    February 22nd, 2013 at 08:35am
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    Love it <3 please update soon :)
    September 18th, 2012 at 01:11pm
  • Barbielovesyou

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    Yay! Gerard came back and all is well...or is it?? LOL Update soon!
    May 23rd, 2012 at 07:37pm
  • murderdolls_queen

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    Yay! You updated!! :D
    May 19th, 2012 at 08:43am
  • murderdolls_queen

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    ack sorry! my laptop hasnt been telling me about updates, please forgive me D:

    and boo for skipping on the sex! <3
    April 24th, 2012 at 08:51am
  • murderdolls_queen

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    Awww! Yay! They kissin'! They happy! Wooooooooooo 8D
    April 5th, 2012 at 07:55am
  • murderdolls_queen

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    Poor Frankie :( I just wanna cuddle him so tight right now :(
    March 18th, 2012 at 09:20pm
  • LoveOrDeath

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    i like it:) annd Poor Frank:(
    March 17th, 2012 at 07:24pm
  • Musicisthesavior

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    Aweeeeee :( I hope he feels better soon! It's sad!
    March 17th, 2012 at 04:50am
  • Keely Noelle

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    Aww :( Poor Frank, poor Gerard, poor vampires.
    March 17th, 2012 at 03:21am
  • Barbielovesyou

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    So, when are you going to update?? It's a rlly nice start if you ask me. :)
    March 11th, 2012 at 01:11am
  • murderdolls_queen

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    I am proud of you for continuing :) I can't wait to see how it turns out :) <3
    March 10th, 2012 at 07:59am
  • Musicisthesavior

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    Keep going! O_O or I will eat you
    March 10th, 2012 at 05:09am
  • murderdolls_queen

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    You! what the fuck were you talking about?! This is amazing! You totally have to continue it!!!!
    February 29th, 2012 at 05:09pm
  • angy_something

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    Woman I saw this when I left you the comment and I had the need to read it and here I am.
    I must say I like it quite a lot. :)
    February 21st, 2012 at 03:04am
  • RedNight!

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    Love this story. Update soon please!
    February 2nd, 2012 at 08:26pm
  • CannibalsDemise

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    Oh one more this I wanted to say. Gerard and Frank's relationship was immediatelyportrayed as something lustful and heated. I'd like to think it is deeper than just that, shoing us their love connection would be beneficial. ^-^
    January 30th, 2012 at 11:34pm
  • CannibalsDemise

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    This is good, it's moving kind of fast though. There was an extreme time lapse in here that actually could be useful to certain elements of your story. Charater developement being one of them. While most, if not all of, the people who read your story will be fans, we still enjoy some back story and emotion. Something leading up to the disappearance or events while the police search.

    One thing that makes a Frerard golden is the emotional relationship of all the guys. Not just Gerard and Frank. Though that does matter too, obviously. I guess I kind of understand your shortness of the story, considering you're on you iPod. However, you need to really go in depth more with the boys. Mikey says something about Gerard being his big brother when Ray is teasing, but there is no real notion of how uncomfortable he is. Ray is there, which is good, because we can't exclude the 'fro, but he is basically a bystander. You say that they are all devestated by Gerard's vanishing, but you haven't established the connection Ray has.

    Regarding all the time skipped over for the search, while you may not have wanted to take the time to write all the boring stuff, it is the little details that keep us reading. There is a lot of dialouge, thoughts, and events that could have taken place in that time period. You say that Mikey and Ray have realized the actuality of the Frerard going on, but don't you think an awkward conversation about it would be good? xD Simply adding some scenes from meeting with police and the sad existance of the remaining band members could really make the story. It is all that fluff that take it from an idea and a plot, to a STORY.

    Hope this helped. I do like the idea you have here, it has potential. :) I will hope to see more!
    January 30th, 2012 at 11:30pm
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