Would You Carry Me to the End? - Comments

  • SquiddyTheMouse

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    Hmm... I'm not exactly sure how to feel about that...
    Damn good writing though :)
    September 23rd, 2012 at 11:19am
  • KilljoyBekah

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    Wow. That actually freaked me out. xD But still, you're a great writer and I wanted to know how it ended. I'm glad that, like your other story, Frank got a some what happy ending in the end.
    August 14th, 2012 at 08:26pm
  • blinded_in_chains

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    Good grief. You don't hold anything back, do you? O_O
    Seriously though, that was one amazing story! The description was so vivid, it even frightened me a little XD Especially the bit with the bottle, that was messed up... Frank's emotional state at the end finished it off beautifully, though, as that's exactly how you'd expect to feel after his ordeal.
    Nicely done! :D
    July 8th, 2012 at 07:53pm
  • hangsang.

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    From the first paragraph I was crying during this. Just... Wow. I felt Frank's fear. It was crazy. Gerard was a fucking psyco lunatic. He deserved being thrown into jail.
    I hope Frank stays safe, though. Geesus... This story was great!
    June 26th, 2012 at 05:21pm
  • ILoveFrerard

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    This was pretty intense, but I absolutely loved it. You didn't hold anything back and I actually could feel the emotion with it, I felt like I wanted to help Frank throughout, but I kind of felt for Gerard, too, as awful as it sounds :O.
    At the end, I got a little emotional because of the confusion Frank feels about whether or not Gee is going to be back or not. It's a really powerful way to end the piece.
    June 3rd, 2012 at 07:09pm
  • BitterEndXII

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    I really loved the concept, I liked the fact that there seemed to be no limits to the writing and so the situation was made to seem more realistic ~ Really good :-) I enjoyed it alot. x
    April 23rd, 2012 at 05:38pm
  • Bella Goes Away.

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    “It’s always that bad! He’s never killed me before!”
    - I'd say that's pretty obvious... Shifty

    Overall I didn't feel the emotions on this. I actually liked the concept of making it so brutal, but it got confusing and the flow was disrupted each time you switched perspectives, and it felt like you went all in on just making it harsh and shocking, so the true emotions behind the characters were lost. I found a few pieces of dialog where it wasn't formatted correctly but not any real issues.

    However, I wonder, why should people "fuck off" if they don't like what you've written? Surely it'd be enough to simply have the warning and if they would bash or flame you could report them? ...
    April 21st, 2012 at 06:53pm
  • Keely Noelle

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    .....wow.....this was incredible.
    April 21st, 2012 at 02:06pm
  • murderdolls_queen

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    That was....Wow. I liked it, I really did. I just don't know what else to say if I'm honest. o.o. This is gunna sound so sadistic, but I really liked the coke bottle bit, it reminded me of your other one shot! Really well done love <3
    April 21st, 2012 at 11:02am